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The World and I by ~DaYog:iconDaYog:



The sky is blue—
I don't remember why.
And it's been so long...
I don't know why.

Cars are screaming
In that strange other-space
While sun dips over horizon
In this normal place?

Steel towers receed
As a fog rolls in
And I smile a smile
Of a man no longer hemmed in.

It's been too long since
I've been alone with me
And had a few moments
Just the world and me.
©2009 ~DaYog
:icondayog:

Author's Comments

Simple, but open to interpretation and deliberately so.

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:iconmadkill:
I think it's a bit too for my liking.

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:icondayog:
Ummm, too what?

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Faith is an unseen bridge spanning a chasm of infinite dimensions.
:iconshatteredlikeglass:
I've missed reading your writing and having stuff of yours to mull over. I quite like this piece... it almost seems like a kind of kid's rhyme, but with a twist (dont ask why tho!).

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:iconmadkill:
Oops.. my bad.

I think it's a bit too open for multiple interpretations for my liking.

Sort of like the film Synecdouché, although that has greater depth.

Perhaps that is what this poem could do with? More depth? ^^;

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:icondayog:
Possibly due to a hint of sadness weariness with a touch of hope?

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Faith is an unseen bridge spanning a chasm of infinite dimensions.
:icondayog:
Meh, each to his own.

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Faith is an unseen bridge spanning a chasm of infinite dimensions.
:iconshatteredlikeglass:
hmmmmm... i dont know. i'll have to think about it.

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:icontammywebb:
i like that your poems have dimensions, they make you feel about 20 things at once

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:icondayog:
Excellent, that's usually one of my prime motives in writing. I like to try to let the reader feel several different things or think a lot while reading, and usually if you try and figure out exactly what I'm trying to say, you'll go nuts. :D

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